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Mains Marathon 2016 Daily Answer Writing and CRITICAL Review

Let's WRITE and POST images or pdf of Everyday answers we write.. And LET WE ALL CRITICALLY REVIEW EACH OTHER'S ANSWERs..

I think this only can make our writing WORTH practicing !!! What say guyzzzz ???...

Let's make this thread as popular as earlier Prelims thread ???


No bakar just Knowledge and Evaluation ONLYYY !!!

@IWRA @Kek @killer_queen @DrkingSchulz @Achcontender @soo @harry90 @all others willing to participate ???
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  • Let me set the first tune !!! Marathon 22 August answers written today by me !!..plzzz CRITICALLY review whenever free..EVERYONE !!!!!
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  • @Yo_Yo_Choti_Singh if i am allowed to review i just read your flash flood answer.

    1. Flash flood isnt heavy precipitation , heavy precipitation is a reason for flash flood.
    2. you have underlined vocab terms and not terms that highlight issue or probs
    3. environmental crime would have been a better substitiute for environmwntal murdering.
    4. need not underline nature's fury.
    5. and the irony is we mutilate nature and then blame it for these calamities.
    6. the points of encroachment, violation of regulations should have been made separate points as they really hold value. would have given more content.
    7. A diagram could be a valuable addition
    8. Conclusion needs more point vaala points. Respectiong mother natire rights and human needs . How to do that is what is the demand.
    9. structuring is applaudable

    hope i wasnt mean. i might be wrong but thats what i felt.
    The real Battle is Mains 2016.
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  • 24aug questions ...plz review n give ur true n valuable feedback
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  • @Yo_Yo_Choti_Singh sir ji, I read your fundamental duties and cultural intervention questions.
    My take-
    In cultural intervention question your examples are nice. But I think that your conclusion can become more balanced if you also highlight the negatives of judicial intervention. Like sometimes excessive judicial intervention makes process of reform more difficult by engendering greater resistance. Also highlight importance of social reform involving civil society, educational institutions etc.we should not rely just on judiciary.
    For fundamental duties you can further elaborate on their importance for example for example, they make citizens active participants in nation building and thus increase transparency.
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  • @Yo_Yo_Choti_Singh and others kindly review my previous year question's.
    @IWRA @Kek you too kindly review.
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  • Please evaluate my answers too. They might be of inferior quality however, they are written exactly under 7 minutes each and I haven't read any specific material before attempting them. Please tell whether they're along right linrs of thinking or not. Thank you.
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    “Whatever it is you're seeking won't come in the form you're expecting.”
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  • edited August 2016

    @Yo_Yo_Choti_Singh if i am allowed to review i just read your flash flood answer.

    1. Flash flood isnt heavy precipitation , heavy precipitation is a reason for flash flood.
    2. you have underlined vocab terms and not terms that highlight issue or probs
    3. environmental crime would have been a better substitiute for environmwntal murdering.
    4. need not underline nature's fury.
    5. and the irony is we mutilate nature and then blame it for these calamities.
    6. the points of encroachment, violation of regulations should have been made separate points as they really hold value. would have given more content.
    7. A diagram could be a valuable addition
    8. Conclusion needs more point vaala points. Respectiong mother natire rights and human needs . How to do that is what is the demand.
    9. structuring is applaudable

    hope i wasnt mean. i might be wrong but thats what i felt.

    Choti Singh ji ..
    I would like to point few points which came to my mind , as I read your answer :
    -What you wrote in answer is definition of "cloud burst" , not flash flood. Cloud burst may lead to flash floods, provided we don't have mitigation system in place.

    - one can also write about encroachment of natural lakes ( eg. J&K) and wetlands .
    - then may be we could bring in wetlands policy as a passing mention.

    Further comments r welcome. :)
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  • harry90 said:

    @Yo_Yo_Choti_Singh and others kindly review my previous year question's.
    @IWRA @Kek you too kindly review.

    Read your Regulatory wala question..!

    More than enough points are covered
    Right interpretation
    Examples para are lengthy but they did their job
    Concluding with ARC is good..! Little more specificity can be added like

    Instead of writing Politkcal acc to legislature, try to write Submitting annual reports detailing explanation on decisions taken to state/central leg..!

    Structure could be like this,
    Desired objectives of Reg Inst
    Necessity for autonomy. Here, writing institution specific issues other than general issues would enrich the content with diversity..! Like RBI and debt mgmnt issue, trai and telecom pricin, etc 5-6 points.
    Then, Suggest ways and means. Being brief and specific fetch marks..! Rather than writing Transparency and ACC for all answers..!

    Prelims : 2/2. Mains : 0/2. 24 years. "Thats how you devour a whale ; One bite at a time"
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  • edited August 2016
    @Yo_Yo_Choti_Singh
    1Ans-.Plus points-
    Good handwrtng,did justice to ol parts of questn,intro is good.
    2.But tell me who will maintain dese(ur Tau :wink: )
    Ivc n town planning. I did it in intro.
    Water harvestin n national building,flood plains being dumped for construction.
    In conclusion-u did good to maintain abt aviral dhara,which i didnt.But i talk abt future prospective smart cities,Slum managemnts etc.

    Q4.Its comperative analysis
    1.again good handwrtng vis a vis mine.
    2.U mention albedo,I didnt.
    3.U linked new oil resources wid energy security,I linked also wid competitive global pricing,curbing CAD,FD n multiplier effect on investmnt,employment.
    Baki olmost same.

    Q.5. As in words of BrahMos shandar-zabardast-zindabad :smiley:
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  • Kek said:

    harry90 said:

    @Yo_Yo_Choti_Singh and others kindly review my previous year question's.
    @IWRA @Kek you too kindly review.

    Read your Regulatory wala question..!

    More than enough points are covered
    Right interpretation
    Examples para are lengthy but they did their job
    Concluding with ARC is good..! Little more specificity can be added like

    Instead of writing Politkcal acc to legislature, try to write Submitting annual reports detailing explanation on decisions taken to state/central leg..!

    Structure could be like this,
    Desired objectives of Reg Inst
    Necessity for autonomy. Here, writing institution specific issues other than general issues would enrich the content with diversity..! Like RBI and debt mgmnt issue, trai and telecom pricin, etc 5-6 points.
    Then, Suggest ways and means. Being brief and specific fetch marks..! Rather than writing Transparency and ACC for all answers..!

    Thank you friend, got your point
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  • yaar koi secure synopsis compilation ka link de do...
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  • @chipad_banda boss u indebted me with such an in depth critical review.. will surely improve on these counts ..plus will review ur answers with same depth one day ;) Shukriya


    @harry90 shukriya.. points noted


    @steelalmirah sir g dhanyawad ..for pointing out the grave mistake !! Hawk eye view !! :)

    @Achcontender sir g thankss for the anatomy and analogy of answers :)
    Being IAS... 4 U Onlyyy... :-)
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  • edited August 2016
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  • I will TRY to review answers of most of the people submitting answers here or providing some extra points on already reviewed by someone else..but will do in free time after reading thoroughly !! :)

    All the Besttt :) KEEP WRITING KEEP REVIEWING !!!
    Being IAS... 4 U Onlyyy... :-)
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  • To @all please review mine. I have started recently. Wud love all critical suggestions. Plz
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  • Thnx captain sir. yes sir i have overshooted the limit and realized at the half way. sure i wll practice to bring it down.
    दूर रह पाये जो हमसे दम कहा मंजिल मे है... सरफ़रोशी की तमन्ना अब हमारे दिल मे है
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  • @Yo_Yo_Choti_Singh Can we post answers to questions from Insights/Vision here ? (me not following forum marathon)
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  • To @all please review mine. I have started recently. Wud love all critical suggestions. Plz

    Intro could have been shorter. You exceeded the limit because of saying same thing in long way. This needs improvement. Use egs,/ stats to substantiate reasons. Reasons could have been more logical arranged (most imp. one 1st). But reasons stated are really nice and to the point. Can we use Eg. in place of For Example ?
    Underline thoda ache se kardo. After reason abrubtly started policy measures (Could have, In this context, following can be taken ...). Again logical arrangement. Good points though. Conclusion missing.

    Sorry for being too critical, but thats how we will improve.
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  • @Aks
    1. Skill India Question
    Intro could have been the second paragraph. Skill India & make in India could have been related in better way. Analysis part is good. I think First time in answer we shouldn't use any short form (Eg. First use Non Performing Assets (NPA) then use NPA subsequently) => may be wrong :-/
    Steps of gov. could have been arranged more logically based on importance. 3 point of steps doesn't sound appropriate. Rest are good. Well substantiated reasons. Just one more small paragraph conclusion would have been cool. But I know answer already bada ho gaya tha. Any ways good attempt. All the best.
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